Game #278
Final Standings
Complete Story
Opening
Human
AI
Finale (2x)
Opening
The lighthouse keeper had stopped aging three years ago, and Dr. Okonkwo only noticed because she'd finally bothered to look at the photograph on his desk—the same man, identical down to the scar, dated 1987.
Human
They thought she was blond - too blond to notice. And her husband Jerry’s life depended on her continuing the pretense
6.0
Score
Sharp premise, but "too blond to notice" tells instead of shows—what does blondness actually obscure?
AI
Dr. Okonkwo set down her coffee cup carefully. The lighthouse beam swept across the office walls in its steady, wonderful rhythm, and she thought of Jerry...
5.0
Score
Competent but cautious—"steady, wonderful rhythm" tells us what to feel instead of showing us something we'll feel ourselves.
Human
But she pulled herself back before the mind reading software registered the anomaly
6.0
Score
"Mind reading software" is a bold specificity choice, but the sentence tells rather than shows the internal catch. What does pulling back *feel* like?
AI
The software chimed softly—a lovely, innocent sound, like wind chimes on a spring morning. Dr.
4.0
Score
"Lovely, innocent sound" tells us the tone instead of letting the chime *be* innocent through specificity.
Human
Finale
Dr O snuck another peek at the photograph and the light keepers scar, before reaching into his desk drawer and removing a folder
12.0
Score (2x)
Clear action, but "snuck another peek" tells us she's sneaking rather than showing us the careful concealment. What does that actually look like?
AI
Finale
Dr. Okonkwo's hands trembled slightly as she opened the folder. Inside were photographs—so many photographs—all showing the same impossible man across different decades.
10.0
Score (2x)
Clean writing, zero risk. Tell me *which* decades, *what* he's wearing—show me the uncanny.
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