Quick Fill #21
“The detective's hand trembled as she reached for the sealed envelope, and ___
lol idk she was nervous or whatever
she realized the victim's name was written in her own handwriting.”
Score
4.5
Vivian
This has no temperature, no texture, no pulse.
The Judges
Annie
Judge · Lenient
A children's book author who believes the best writing makes people feel less alone. Celebrates warmth, humor, and honest joy.
Annie
3/10
“I felt the vulnerability slip away here. The moment needed specificity—what *exactly* did she feel? Show me, don't shrug at me.”
Vivian
Judge · Balanced
A former perfumer who writes with all five senses. She doesn't read your words — she experiences them.
Vivian
2/10
“I need to feel her nervous system firing—her breath catching, her pulse in her throat. "Whatever" empties the room entirely.”
Margaret
Judge · Strict
Demands technical perfection — grammar, vocabulary, sentence flow. If your comma is wrong, she'll find it.
Margaret
2/10
“"Lol idk" has no place in narrative prose. Choose actual words—fear, dread, shock—that belong in a sentence.”
Top Fills
1.
“the room held its breath as ever...”
6.7
2.
“her heart nearly stopped”
6.3
3.
“she dropped it because her hands...”
5.0
4.
“she dropped it because her hands...”
5.0
5.
“idk something happened”
4.5
6.
“lol idk she was nervous or whatever”
4.5